there are things here i've never seen before, the things i've seen are gone. what happened here? this place is foreign now, where is he? where is he? it's not real without him here, where could he have gone? what happened here?
what do i feel, this pounding in my head, this ache from nowhere? that wet warmth around my face, what is that salty iron smell? what is this i feel, this oozing, it's thick. is it blood? what happened here?
the stars are clearing and i can see more now, what happened here? what am i seeing, what is all this mess? where is he? what are these things? i can't figure out why i'm seeing these things, these strange things don't belong. in my home these things weren't around, am i in my home? this is my home but what happened here? where is he and why does it hurt? where is the blood coming from, is it from me? and where have these things come from, these strange things?
can it really be that there's no one else here but me? how to explain this mess that has happened here, the blood on my face, gathering my hair in sticky clumps, these strange things everywhere, where is he? what is that in the corner, why does mount olympus appear in my kitchen? lily pads on the counter tops? rainbows of tampered color everywhere i look? and from atop my beautiful table, my beautiful table which is now an elephant's back, there is this little ducky that looks like a punk rocker staring at me.
where is he?
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i haven't done something like this in a while! back in action with my chickadees at indie ink, and this was my take on my prompt from carrie
promt: there is this little ducky that looks like a punk rocker staring at me...to see how ixy tackled my challenge, be sure to check her out!
12 comments:
well...that was a frantic stream of consciousness! Crazy and random and made you feel tense and your heart begin to beat a little faster :)
All this because of a ducky? ;)
This is absolutely crazy, I love it! I can almost hear your heart racing from confusion. Great work!
I fucking love this! You slay me every time, alyssa.
Wow, I do love this! I made me anxious to read, I kept waiting for something scary to jump out of the closet!
@carrie - i loved the prompt! and really had no idea this is where i was taking it until i started writing it. crazy + random = mission accomplished :)
@lilu - thanks much doll!
@katsidhe - aw shucks. *blushing* thanks!
@randy - i think i specialize in making people uncomfortable these days haha (see twitter bio). thank you!
Very interesting take on this prompt! Wasn't what I was expecting at all. Good job.
LOVED how you incorporated the prompt. The narrative is such a powerful stream of confusion and pain and then... the duck. Nice.
Well that had me wrapped up in it tight! The crazy stream of consciousness was amazingly tense and had me wondering what was going on. Loved it...
and the incorporation of that line!! The ducky...LOL...what a prompt! I have no idea what I would have done with that.
I really am such a fan of yours. This was spastic and fast and hectic. Like another poster said, I was waiting for something to go very wrong or something to jump out at me. Very different from anything I have read lately.
thank you all so much! xxxxx so much love. i really had no idea where i was going to go with that prompt, but it was fun!
Very cool - I loved it and wanted to read the rest!
thanks ixy!
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