I'll Show You Mine

In the spirit of today's linkup with Steph and Jana, I want to show you my book. Except when I say book, I mean manuscript.

I haven't done a ton of reading since we last linked—at least none that you'd want to hear about. I'm in the middle of two novels and spending more time reading yoga books than anything else, so I wouldn't have a good post for today. (I DO fully intend on sharing my best of the year when we reconvene here in a few weeks!)

But I mentioned a few weeks ago that I wanted some of my manuscript to see the light of day, so I thought today I'd share an excerpt from my work in progress. It's really just for me to stop being a baby and put it in the world, but I'd love any thoughts or feedback if you have any you feel like sharing. Also, I'm having heart palpitations right now as I prepare to schedule this, and I thought you should know.

The following excerpt appears in the beginning of a novel, and hopefully doesn't require any background to understand. Enjoy, maybe, a little bit, please, I hope?
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August 23, 2010: Orientation Day – her 

I thought it was completely fucking pointless for me to live in a dorm at a school I could ride my bike to from my home where I already had a perfectly good bedroom, but damn it if my parents weren’t committed to getting me out of the house. I eventually deduced they were trying to get me out to spare me the torture of witnessing their separation and divorce (which they didn’t—spare me, that is) or maybe they simply didn’t want me around to distract them from yelling awful things at each other and threatening to break each other’s prized possessions.

My least favorite aunt once suggested to me that it was good for me to live at school because it would “improve my social landscape.” What she was really trying to say was that she thought I was a spoiled brat because I was an only child and I needed to practice sharing and pretending people didn’t annoy me as much as they did. I’d be lying if I said she was totally wrong, but I can’t help that my parents decided to make a lot of money and spend it stupidly on buying me things I never asked for, can I?

Usually when people find out this detail about my upbringing, they immediately assume that my name is Paris because my parents were honeymooning there when my mom got pregnant with me. They weren’t though. My mom just binge-watched teen dramas while she was pregnant with me, and decided that she had to name me Paris after, well, several different characters from late-nineties and early-aughties dramedies, none of whom are likeable the majority of the time they spend on screen. So I had that in common with my namesakes, I guess.

August 24, 2010 – him

“Mason?”

So there he was. My roommate for my first year of college was, apparently, the type of person who shows up for move-in three days late, the day after Orientation. With dirty hands toting a garbage bag full of clothes and a goddamn silver hoop earring.

August 25, 2010 – her

“Mason?”

I perked up. I’d only met one Mason in my life, and it had been two days prior, during Orientation. I was sitting in Mythology class when I heard a girl say the name again, and even though I was intelligent enough to get into Ballard College and intelligent enough to understand there might be more than one person on this campus named Mason, I just had to assume the Mason being addressed from somewhere behind me by my apparent classmate was the Mason who had stepped on my skirt and made me flash my entire Orientation group forty-eight hours before.

September 1, 2010 – him

I grew up with a big brother. I’ve known plenty of embarrassment in my life. When you’re the youngest of two boys, embarrassment is a way of life. I felt bad for embarrassing the girl in my Orientation group, and even worse when she—Paris—showed up in my Mythology class a few days afterward. But a week later, when she still refused to accept my apology, I thought she was being a little bit dramatic.

I’d heard a lot of things about girls from New Jersey. The things girls from New Jersey said about girls from New Jersey were a lot different from the things other people said about girls from New Jersey. Based on my interactions with Paris, I have to give the edge to the people from the other forty-nine. Girls from New Jersey are really...something.

“At least you weren’t wearing granny panties” was, now that I think about it in hindsight, probably not the best thing to say to a girl after she flashes her bare ass at an entire crowd of people because you were drooling over her too hard to realize you were about to pull down her skirt. But the culprit is really the obnoxiously long skirts girls started wearing that summer. And also thongs.
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Life According to Steph

Comments

  1. Alyssa congratulations!! I was so excited reading this and can't wait for more!!! xo, Biana -BlovedBoston

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  2. WEEEEEEEEEEEE, you did it! The manuscript is out there, so exciting and sooooo good. LOVE the way you've written it so far, can't wait for more.

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  3. Ahhh this is awesome!! Hope we get to read more sometime soon! BTW I wouldn't accept Mason's apology too soon either...lol. I am very intrigued by this story & characters!

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  4. I'm so intrigued! I'm with Mason, though, maxi skirts are stupid and I'm also clumsy and that's totally the sort of thing I'd do by accident. (Once I stepped on the back of a coworkers flip flop, causing us to both trip and collapse in a heap in the doorway.)

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  5. Lovely, lovely! I'm so happy you had the courage to share with us today. I'll love when I get to consume it all at once!

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  6. YES! Thank you for sharing. I'd like to read more.

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  7. So happy to have read an excerpt!! Looking forward to more <3

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  8. Yay! I'm definitely intrigued so far. A little confused about who's saying "Mason?" on Aug 25th. The female narrator or another female classmate? But maybe that's more clear with additional text. Either way, very exciting! Thanks for sharing!

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  9. I'm just going to sit here and slow clap it out for your awesomeness. Also, I want to read more. Is there a place I can sign up for VIP access ? Please and thank you.

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  10. Congrats for sharing this!!! It is awesome and I want to read more :)

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  11. OMG OMG OMG I haven't read it yet, I just read the first sentence and you're gonna show us an excerpt of the book and OMG I'm so excited.

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    1. And yes I definitely want to read the whole thing. Kudos on being so brave to share it here :) love it :)

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  12. I'm probably way late with this but what is this new layout/design?! I love it! And gahh so not fair to share just this little bit! Is the next excerpt coming tomorrow?! ;) But really I am already so pulled in and can't wait to read more! You encourage me so much!

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  13. This is awesome!!! Thanks for sharing!! Im definitely interested to see what happens :)

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  14. Congrats! How exciting. Sounds interesting so far.

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  15. I'm wearing a maxi skirt right now and almost face-planted on the stairs this morning! Thanks for sharing with us xoxo

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  16. Alyssa.... I can not WAIT to see where Mason and Paris are going. I love them already. Mason seems like my kind of guy. His logic is infallible. Also, and this is probably just me, "from late-nineties and early-aughties dramedies" What is early-aughties?

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  17. YAYAYAYY!!!! So so so proud of you! Cannot wait to read more. :)

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  18. About a week late reading this but yay!! I'm so glad you shared some of your book!! I can't wait to read more. The "Mason?" part kind of confused me on the him entry, but everything else made sense!

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  19. late to the game, but I was pulled in with just this short snippet. I agree with everyone else about the name thing, but it became clear as I kept reading AND I didn't have to wait until 15 pages later to "get it," which makes me most appreciative.

    How bad is it that I've gotten myself tangled in my own maxi skirt? They really should cater more to short girl problems!

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